in a couple of weeks
in a couple of weeks
you will no longer
be able to tell
where the mend is
this is what she promised
the afternoon she tried
and after time had passed
when i found that i could still
lay a finger on it
i saw her again
if you could stop
dwelling
for even one
morning with me, it will
go away
this is her response
an escapist guess, at best
and on the morning i stopped
the room was empty
a loose goodbye to chew on
a stray silence
.
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Subtle and poignant. I love how it is woven so we just can’t ignore what isn’t said aloud. Thank you for sharing this.
thank you so much!! (smile)
wow!
You are such a good story teller.
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shakira
http://justmeshakirack.blogspot.com
thank you so much. i will check it out! cheers!
Good poem. The last two lines were
especially good.
thank you, again! (smile) i had a mind to just cut it down to the last stanza entirely!
OMG that’s brilliant. Very touching. You’re one multi-talented artist. 🙂
look who’s talking…(smile) thank you!!
like the line “stray silence”
thanks you for the beautiful poetry
thank you very much!
very nicely expressed..
thank you!
no prob..